Writing Assignment

Following is a poem that I'm working on for a group assignment. If you have suggestion to improve it, please let me know . . . I welcome all criticism. (But be nice, please)

THE MELODY

Barely discernable above the garbled voices,

Breaking through the static

A melody

A voice, tremulous and elusive

Losing strength in the cacophony

Then growing more insistent

Like the ebb and flow of the tide

inching closer with each wave

Now and then I hear it

Clear and pure and painfully honest

Now and then

I don't

Maybe you would like to hear it

Or not?

If I can tune out the static

and listen to the song

Will it be too familiar?

I fear

The melody is me